✨ 1. Emotional Perception
“A sense of awe” →
- “She stood in awe.”
- “Awe gripped her.”
- “It was breathtaking.”
- “She was stunned by the scale of it.”
“A sense of dread” →
- “Dread coiled in her gut.”
- “Something felt wrong.”
- “He couldn’t shake the creeping unease.”
“A sense of joy” →
- “Joy lit her from within.”
- “She beamed.”
- “She laughed without meaning to.”
🧠 2. Cognitive or Intuitive Realization
“A sense of understanding” →
- “He began to understand.”
- “Clarity came in a rush.”
- “The pieces clicked into place.”
“A sense of familiarity” →
- “It felt familiar.”
- “Something about it tugged at her memory.”
- “She’d been here before—somehow.”
👁 3. Environmental or Physical Impressions
“A sense of motion” →
- “The floor shifted beneath them.”
- “She swayed with the rhythm of the boat.”
- “The world tilted slightly.”
“A sense of silence” →
- “The room was silent.”
- “The hush was total.”
- “Even her breath felt loud.”
🛠 Rewrite Strategy:
- Drop the abstraction
Instead of “a sense of urgency”, say “They rushed.” or “She didn’t pause.” - Turn it into action or sensation
Rather than “a sense of calm washed over him,” try “He exhaled. The noise faded.” - Use body language or internal response
Swap “a sense of fear” for “Her chest tightened.” or “Goosebumps rose on her arms.”
💡 When “a sense of” is worth keeping:
Sometimes it fits when you're intentionally hovering above the action—giving a reflective, narrator-like summary of atmosphere or emotion:
“There was a sense of something unfinished between them.”
In those rare cases, it adds tone. But if you're close-in with your characters, replace it with lived experience.